One of the main elements of focus this week consisted around fixing story adjustments and final tweaks to the animatic. The feedback we received from our previous story reel consisted some of the following...
SPECIFIC ANIMATIC UPDATES
• Add point of view or over the shoulder shot of Gan comparing crystal rock to star
• Speed up title, cut black between shots and make Titan enter screen from the very beginning of the shot
• Trim/speed up sequence of Titan flying through destroyed planets
• When Titan is trying to get Gan’s attention, pull back to see his disappointed expression and change position of body (do not entirely cover face)
• Holograms REappear after shot of Titan struggling
• Add negative space to make Titan’s silhouette clearer in the shot where he notices him
• Better silhouette in head cock scene [separate characters]
• When Gan turns to look at destroyed planets [in realization] and turns back, make sure direction is consistent
• Add close up of reaction when Titan dies
Shorten the scanning that Titan does initially
Celestial logo is too long. Get to the story so we can grab the audience quicker
Speed up Titan's movements
During the intro of the film the time lapse needs to be more clear.
-make city lights appear on the planet as it develops
Make Titan's death more
dramatic. It happens to fast. Shot should linger so the audience has time to get "the feels."
-flickering/sparking/smoking, and titan dies
in his hands
Make the destruction in the holograms that Titan projects to Celestial being in color.
Destruction during the planet needs
to be longer
-didn’t feel Titan was in a dangerous
position and needs to be emphasized.
Needs more
cuts between the 2 characters during the climax for more of a buildup.
Too much
time between Titan and Gan after Gan shocks with lightning. The timing should
be fixed so it’s more apparent that Gan was the reason for Titans hurt.
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